For Jakye’s paper, the basic topic that i covered was ideas. I believe that Jakye that should look to edit and review the last sentence in the second paragraph. the sentence reads, “They even view it as toxic because artists cannot help monetarily with their jobs. However, can we just few and importance of something with the fact that it may or may not being in monetary gain for the needy?” I would look to just simplify and cut some words out as i found it a little bit confusing.
For Nick’s paper i will be talking about the idea of evidence. At the end of the second paragraph, Nick refers to Sothans’ text about the drowning kid analogy. Instead of trying to put it in your words, you should take the analogy directly from the text and use the quotations with the correct citetation.
While reading Jacob’s paper, I noticed the paper was very well organized and flow of transitional ideas worked very well. Jacob found very powerful quotes and had them lined up in his text where they should belong. These ideas all blended well together to make for a easy and comfortable read.
Global editing was a lot better experience for me than local editing. With global editing, it allows you to flow through the text and just enjoy reading it and taking a perspective on the big picture. You don’t have to sit there and nit pick at all the little grammatical mistakes. Often times as a reader, the brain will distance itself away from the actual text and begin to focus on commas and sentences. I like the idea of global editing a lot better.
